In school for a few weeks miss mcleods writing group has been writing about a moment in time we where making sick sentences better by adding detail and wow words hear is my writing. Brrrm, brrrm went the motorbikes as they quickly passed by.
The riders held on very tightly to the grips.the motorbikes Bolted up the hill.as the dust raised in the air and hit the riders eyes the rider felt proud of their self.
As the riders raced they felt the sweat running through there suit.the riders can feel the dust swooping around them.The riders can see the bumpy dusty track in front of them.They can hear there sweat dripping down their face. They might be thinking there going to win the race . they are having fun and trying their best and give it ago.I wonder if they will run out of gas.can you give me some feed back?
